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Postby elfinjedi » Mon Feb 16, 2004 10:55 am

transparency is the name I've given my portfolio of poems. I'll post more poems if you want me to!

An Angel Died Today
by: elfinjedi

An angel died today,
I lift my hands up and I pray
that I am misunderstoof,
for he was kind and he was good.
As for me? I made him cry.
He never deserved to die.
He turned and ran away from me,
I said things I didn't mean you see.

An angel died today.
I beg him not to go away.
But he just looks at me and sighs
and on broken wings he flies
into the sky,
he falls and dies.
And if you don't believe it,
these feathers ought to prove it.


you like, ne?
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Postby The Grammarian » Mon Feb 16, 2004 11:25 am

Hai, hai. ;)
To all, life thou givest, to both great and small.
In all life, thou livest, the true life of all.
We blossom and flourish as leaves on a tree
And wither and perish, but naught changeth thee.

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Postby Zilch » Mon Feb 16, 2004 7:10 pm

:thumb: :sweat: :rock:

In other words:
Great stuff, I liked it, post more.
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Postby elfinjedi » Tue Feb 17, 2004 5:48 am

oh! you're comments are moi moi appreciated! here's another one!

Shards
Broken shards of mirrored glass,
reflecting the forgotten past,
lying in a heaping mass
in the brown and dying grass.

Into the ground they slowly seep
playing the nightmares in my sleep,
leaving me alone to weep
as further in the shadows creep.

Now run away from this place
filled with dishonor and disgrace,
but keep me in your warm embrace;
these shards are cursed, that is the case.

The light that steadily comes this way,
bright as the sun of early day
casts on the shards a bloodred ray;
death or hope? I cannot say.

Cast away these shards of sorrow,
and run astray into tomorrow
where these memories cannot follow,
into the abyss where dreams are hollow.

owari!
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Postby Icarus » Tue Feb 17, 2004 11:02 am

Good job.
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Postby Key_blade » Tue Feb 17, 2004 1:07 pm

gooo jedi! w00t w00t! as Mr. Kaiser says: "One of these days, I'll have to pay money in order to read you poetry!" :thumb: :thumb:
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Postby Zilch » Tue Feb 17, 2004 1:39 pm

Other than extremely slight rhythm probs, very well done. w00t.
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Postby Rachel » Tue Feb 17, 2004 4:46 pm

yes good poems, please post more
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