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a song i wrote in my spare time

Postby Althaia » Mon Jul 03, 2006 11:19 am

hey i nver knew theres a writing thing here dang i neeed to get out of the rpg threads more:lol: anyway here it is:

the heart

the heart is what keeps us living
the heart is where our love begins
the hearts where our soul lives and
where our brokeness begins

i have seen the ones who say they love
their wifes but inside they are longing
for a purpose other then loving them
they lead double lives one loving and caring
one hating and schemeing

the heart is what keeps us living
the heart is where our love begins
the heart is where the soul is and
where our brokeness begins

the ones we love are part of us but
do we truly love them?
do we truly what to protect them?
what is it today that makes us all mad with
power?

the heart is what keeps us living
the heart is where our heart begins
the heart is where our soul is and
where the brokeness begins

there are those who what power to control the world
there are those who want power to heal
but they are all the same that same power
corrupts and distorts all the well intended things
these people thought of

the heart is what keeps us living
the heart is where our love begins
the heart is where the soul is and
where the brokeness begins...



the end comments are apperciated :thumb:
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procastinators unite.......................tommorrow

[color=palegreen]So in times when all your hope is gone
And you go through life afraid
In your heart there lies a hopeful song
That is there to guide the way
And all the hurt and all the pain
You soon will learn was not in vain
For all your prayers, they will be heard
They'll come to pass through faith [/color]

[color=palegreen]~When you Believe from Prince of Egypt


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Postby Yahshua » Mon Jul 03, 2006 11:24 am

Hm interesting song.
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Postby creed4 » Mon Jul 03, 2006 11:54 am

It is good, you might want to mention that the Heart apart from Christ is decetfull beyond all things
Tis No Fool to lose what he can not keep to gain what he can never lose.
What does it profit a man to gain the World yet lose his soul.
Choose Life that you Might live.
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Postby Althaia » Mon Jul 03, 2006 11:56 am

yeah i am still working on it i will post the full song later i am to lazy to do it now :sweat:
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procastinators unite.......................tommorrow

[color=palegreen]So in times when all your hope is gone
And you go through life afraid
In your heart there lies a hopeful song
That is there to guide the way
And all the hurt and all the pain
You soon will learn was not in vain
For all your prayers, they will be heard
They'll come to pass through faith [/color]

[color=palegreen]~When you Believe from Prince of Egypt


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Postby Seppuku » Mon Jul 03, 2006 12:01 pm

i thinkit flows better if u leave out the "our" in

the hearts where our soul lives and
where our brokeness begins

brokenness is kinda a akward word. id try to find a simmilar yet different one.

but yea, nice
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Postby allpayedatcross » Mon Jul 03, 2006 12:57 pm

me like, it describes the truth well
"But I tell you that anyone that looks at a woman lustfully has already commited adultury with her in his heart"
(Matt. 5:28)

"But God demonstrates his own love for us in this: While we were still sinners, Christ died for us."
(Romans 5:8)

"Jesus answered, "I am the way and the truth and the life. No one comes to the Father except through me.""
(John 14:6)

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God proved His love on the Cross. When Christ hung, and bled, and died, it was God saying to the world, "I love you."
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Postby Althaia » Mon Jul 03, 2006 5:53 pm

thanks for the comments and you all i may be doing a wall if i can get it the right size for this look for it sometime
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[color=palegreen]So in times when all your hope is gone
And you go through life afraid
In your heart there lies a hopeful song
That is there to guide the way
And all the hurt and all the pain
You soon will learn was not in vain
For all your prayers, they will be heard
They'll come to pass through faith [/color]

[color=palegreen]~When you Believe from Prince of Egypt


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Postby Althaia » Wed Jul 05, 2006 1:53 pm

the heart

the heart is what keeps us living
the heart is where our love begins
the hearts where our soul lives and
where our brokeness begins

i have seen the ones who say they love
their wifes but inside they are longing
for a purpose other then loving them
they lead double lives one loving and caring
one hating and schemeing

the heart is what keeps us living
the heart is where our love begins
the heart is where the soul is and
where our brokeness begins

the ones we love are part of us but
do we truly love them?
do we truly what to protect them?
what is it today that makes us all mad with
power?

the heart is what keeps us living
the heart is where our heart begins
the heart is where our soul is and
where the brokeness begins

there are those who what power to control the world
there are those who want power to heal
but they are all the same that same power
corrupts and distorts all the well intended things
these people thought of

the heart is what keeps us living
the heart is where our love begins
the heart is where the soul is and
where the brokeness begins

when i watch the ones who love christ
they make an example to others
so that others may belive in him
the one they call!!!!!! GOD!!!!!!


thats the whole song enjoy all ;)
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procastinators unite.......................tommorrow

[color=palegreen]So in times when all your hope is gone
And you go through life afraid
In your heart there lies a hopeful song
That is there to guide the way
And all the hurt and all the pain
You soon will learn was not in vain
For all your prayers, they will be heard
They'll come to pass through faith [/color]

[color=palegreen]~When you Believe from Prince of Egypt


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Postby creed4 » Fri Jul 07, 2006 4:38 pm

Good.
One Question Do you count yourself amoung us
Tis No Fool to lose what he can not keep to gain what he can never lose.
What does it profit a man to gain the World yet lose his soul.
Choose Life that you Might live.
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Postby Althaia » Fri Jul 07, 2006 7:58 pm

as a christian yes i am writing it through the eyes of a non-beliver i tend to go into the eyes of the person i want to protray in my songs its sorta my personal touch in my songs
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procastinators unite.......................tommorrow

[color=palegreen]So in times when all your hope is gone
And you go through life afraid
In your heart there lies a hopeful song
That is there to guide the way
And all the hurt and all the pain
You soon will learn was not in vain
For all your prayers, they will be heard
They'll come to pass through faith [/color]

[color=palegreen]~When you Believe from Prince of Egypt


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Postby creed4 » Sat Jul 08, 2006 10:06 am

I see
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What does it profit a man to gain the World yet lose his soul.
Choose Life that you Might live.
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