tell me what u think about these lyrics

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tell me what u think about these lyrics

Postby fairyprincess90 » Sat Jun 03, 2006 11:22 am

i wrote these lyrics... i have a piano part for it too...
i need some feedback on what u think... this doesnt talk about God but its for the guy i like......

Thinking of You

i think about you everyday,
i love to watch you as play, your guitar...
i dream about you everynight,
and every word i write, is for you....

and you dont even know that twenty-four seven im thinking of you,
and you dont even care that every night im dreaming of you,
and you dont even know that all i do is to impress you,
and you dont have a clue how much i care for you.

if you read my diary,
on every page you would see, something about you...
and if you could see my dreams,
you would see, im dreaming of you...

and you dont even know that twenty-four seven im thinking of you,
and you dont even care that every night im dreaming of you,
and you dont even know that all i do is to impress you,
and you dont have a clue how much i care for you.

its kinda short and whutever but ... yeah... i like it ^_^
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Postby everdred12a » Sat Jun 03, 2006 11:43 am

I think it's nice, and really heartfelt. Even though you're already aware of it, I'll say that I think you should flesh it out some. If you could add another verse, I think you'd pretty much have it nailed.

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