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CR' writes poetry...

Postby ChristianKitsune » Wed May 31, 2006 2:41 am

I wrote these for my friends...no one in particular...just all my friends in general..

When you are hurt

When you prick your finger. When you fall down.
I will always be there...to lift you up.
When your dreams fall through. When you don’t want to go on
I will always be there...to wake you.
When you decide that it’s too hard. When you don’t see the point
I will be there...to show you the way.

Lift up

I feel your pain. I know of your sorrows.
And though I may not understand.
I want to be there, like a light in the darkness.
Like an umbrella in the most torrential days,
I want to be there.
Let me be your life boat, let me lead you back to happiness.
In the coldest days in the harshest days I want to protect you.
To lift you up above the clouds like a balloon.
I feel your pain. I know of your sorrows.
And though I may not understand.
I want to be there, like a light in the darkness.
Because...that’s what friends are for...
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Postby KBMaster » Wed May 31, 2006 5:35 am

Very nice poem. :thumb:
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Postby creed4 » Wed May 31, 2006 8:05 am

Good Job, keep up the work
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Postby Linksquest » Wed May 31, 2006 10:05 am

*gives CR a hug* Great work!

I Especially liked these parts of the poems:

I will always be there...to wake you.

I want to be there, like a light in the darkness.


Keep it up! :thumb:
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Postby Sakura15 » Wed May 31, 2006 10:55 am

:hug: Great Job Oneechan!! I love them! ^^
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Postby ChristianKitsune » Wed May 31, 2006 3:13 pm

WOW thanks everyone!!!
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Postby Jingo Jaden » Wed May 31, 2006 3:16 pm

Loved it CR.

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Postby faithfighter » Wed May 31, 2006 8:28 pm

awesome peoms Oneechan...you are such a loyal and wonderful friend!! *glomps*
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Postby Anna Mae » Thu Jun 01, 2006 12:28 pm

You express very nice sentiments. I would make one note. In the parts of the first one such as
When you prick your finger. When you fall down.
I will always be there...to lift you up.

I would suggest that you change the first two periods to commas to make it flow better.
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