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What kind of God?

Postby Slater » Mon Apr 25, 2005 8:55 pm

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/17635603/

Note: Plz don't move this to links. This is my own work, I just posted the DA version of it so that users may comment on it there if they have an account.

Anyways, I've been feeling kinda guilty lately, so I wrote this... ja... comments?
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Postby Nate » Mon Apr 25, 2005 8:59 pm

I never read poetry...and I usually ignore everything in this forum.

But...something pressed on me to read this thread.

Now I know why.

I needed to read that.
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Postby Cedahlia » Wed Apr 27, 2005 9:27 pm

That was so beautiful, I started crying. I can relate so well...there are no words.
You truly have a talent for writing, and I am just amazed...like Kaemmerite, I needed to read that.
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Postby Slater » Thu Apr 28, 2005 7:18 am

^^; uh thanx! maybe I'll do more...
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Postby livewire » Thu Apr 28, 2005 5:03 pm

All I can really say is "wow"
I really liked that poem....
I really felt that poem...
Thank you....
thank you for sharing that with me...
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Postby Jasdero » Thu Apr 28, 2005 5:16 pm

....That was beautifully written. I'm one that usually hates poetry, but really, very well done.
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Postby Slater » Wed Apr 12, 2006 12:05 am

nice first post
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Postby ShiroiHikari » Wed Apr 12, 2006 8:24 am

Looks like this thread is kinda old, but I missed out on this the first time. That was a really great poem, Slater. Do you still write stuff?
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Postby Kry » Wed Apr 12, 2006 1:17 pm

I guess someone revived this post so I just had to take a look at it as well.....and I was honestly moved. I loved your poem, it almost seemed like a song too...because of the bit of repition in it. Your poetic form is pretty orignal as well, which I liked. Also, its awesome because you kept the attention of the reader, while ryhming and getting your point across, you broke into the readers heart and let them see and feel the same as you were when you wrote that poem. It was just amazing. I hope your still writing. ^_^
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Postby Sun.Ice » Fri Apr 14, 2006 12:00 am

That was beautiful...Wow....Amazing....

That touched me. God blessed you with an awesome beautiful talent.
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