Love Wish Mish-Mash: A Shojou comedy

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Love Wish Mish-Mash: A Shojou comedy

Postby Naga Kisaki » Fri Jan 27, 2006 10:09 pm

I wasn't going to show anyone this series until I finished a different one, but you guys kind of made me want to reveal it. :sweat:


I'll write a little intro by the main character, then an exsplanation of the series main idea, then a few character bios. If you think it's worth reading, just say so and I'll go through with the project


INTRO:

Hi. My name is Kaida Aisumi. I'm a Senior at Tanitoki University; In training to become a--- Well, Acctually, I'm not sure what I want to do with my life yet.

I live in a small, two-bedroom house that my deceased aunt left me. I go to school, do my homework, cook (badley) and watch TV like any other person my age. I'm pretty much an avarage girl.

Or at least I was, until a wish I made got me envolved in the craziest situation possible.

I asked for the perfect guy,and I'm now stuck with four. Oh sure, it might not be bad, but NONE OF THEM ARE HUMAN!!!


So, Thanks to that single wish, I've got an Intergalactic Bounty Hunter, An Alien Prince, A Space Monster who can change his shape, and an alien Con-man wanted in 13 galaxies, all staying at my house. If I want to come out of this without making a big mess, I have to get rid of them. BUt that's easier said than done, because Until I fall in love with one of them, were all stuck with each other.

*sigh* Isn't life just like that sometime?


CHARACTERS:

Kaida Aisumi: a tough young lady still in collage. She's got a strong personality, and a short temper. She's stuck with the job of careing for five alien men, all of which are gorgeous, and all of which have some quality she likes. She develops a crush on Kikiireru.

Manelin Polaris: Prince of Neo-lunar Colony Seven, He's a very genteel and noble person. He talks like a midevil knight usually, and treats Kaida like a lady, often calling her 'maiden' or 'Fair Lady'. He see's the other three guys as riff-raff and is sure that Kaida will fall in love with him. After all, he's infatuated with her.

Reigen: A street-wise, trigger-happy antisocial Bounty-hunter with a faint mean streak. He's the usual 'Bad boy', always ready with a smart-alec remark or a cold statement. He originally came looking for Net, but ended up staying with Kaida. He doesn't really show his feelings for her much. Then again, he doesn't really share his feelings at all. He can control a high-tech mechanized suit and has an arsenal of high-tech weapons.

Benjiro: A fifteen-foot tall space monster with a slightly skeletal form, claws, white hair, five eyes, blue-grey calcified skin, and a mouth in his stomach. Not very attractive, But it helps that he can change himself to look completely human, even to the point of being good-looking. He's a bit of a misfit when it comes to his kind, he's mellow and sensitive. The matures, most sensible member of the group He's often the one to break up the constant fighting. He's a very neat person, and spends most of his time indoors, in his human and true form, usually cleaning up the house or giving Kaida advice. He's very soft-spoken about his feelings, prefearing to exspress his feelings subtlely and yearn from a distance. He eats once every couple months and sleeps upside down. When he's asleep, he can't hold on to his human disguise, and always reverts to his true form.


Net: An infamous Hadien con-man from the Planet Disops. He's very haughty and sarcastic. And also devious. He was the first to meet Kaida and shares a special bond with her. He's a very crafty character, always ready to talk his way out of any sticky situation, or simply outsmart his opponents. He's intellient and, to those who don't know him, very charming. His relation ship is slightly love-hate. At times he's obsessed with Kaida, at others she drives him crazy because his wiles don't work on her. He can be very jealous whenever the other guys try to spend time with her and tries to interfear with that as much as possible, but at heart he can be a kind person when it's most needed. He looks almost completely human except for his strange hair-color, impish ears, and the fact that he has a long devil-tail. (the kind with a triangle at the end)

Kikiireru: The keeper of wishes.Once every year, in he world, one person's wich comes true. He's the one who gives them the message that it'll come true. He's a fairly nice, if not bumbling guy. He often pops in an out to check on Kaida and the guys to see if she's chosen yet. WHen he's not working, he has a secret human identity as a teachers assistant. No one ever recognizes him.


That's pretty much all I got so far. It's a work in progress. :P
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Postby Naga Kisaki » Wed Feb 15, 2006 8:44 pm

Wow? Is it THAT bad, guys? LOL.
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Postby uc pseudonym » Thu Feb 16, 2006 12:54 pm

Don't think that; a lot of threads drop off the front page without being noticed and thus without any responses.

As for the idea, I have two separate responses. First, the idea of a romantic comedy with a bunch of people living in the same house has been done a lot, and not generally very well. But my other response is that your idea, if made into a manga or anime, would probably sell fairly well, presuming you executed it effectively.

Are you looking to write this or draw this?
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Postby everdred12a » Thu Feb 16, 2006 2:46 pm

It's an interesting premise. I'm a sucker for this genre, so long as it's executed properly (I love Ranma and Tenchi). I'm interested to see what it'll be like once you start writing/drawing it.

Also, don't feel bad about people ignoring your work. It doesn't necessarily mean it's bad. It's just that different people have different tastes. I posted here once and no one ever replied, but life goes on.

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Postby starstoryteller » Sun Mar 19, 2006 4:19 pm

Well I think its a differnt take on it where its the girl and and bunch of guys. (more beshis for fans)
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