The Last Lament (a song/poem thing)

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The Last Lament (a song/poem thing)

Postby Dirge » Sun Nov 16, 2003 8:21 am

((to caa: I really really dont want your comments on this- I'm having a really hard time being serious again- its just my nature to be crazy, so I dont want your comments, cause it already feels weird- I just know I'm gonna mess up the mood of this poem/song thing somehow.))

It beckons me, do I give in?
The calling lying within
There nothing I could do
Nothing to show
All I have to give
is the last lament

this scrapbook reminds me of my past
these slashes remind me of my reality
I wish we could forever immortilize our time together
oh how I long to behold you in my eyes again
When in doubt of anything you call,
and it seems that just for that moment,
that distance between us is irrelivant- irrelivant

but I had to leave, and sometimes I wish that you too would
just leave me alone.
Your very voice drives me to my insanity
I will wait for you a bittersweet eternity

Just for that moment, the distance is irrelivant,
but your very voice drive me to insanity

I will always want the world to know:
You are my silent night, my sky of twinkling stars
You are my cloudy day, my puddle of rain on the ground
You are everything inside of me, wanting to be set free
You are the reason that I live, the reason I'm stained with tears.
You are more than my all.
Call out my name; reach out your hand- I'm blind and falling, I cant find my way home

And just for that moment,
the distance between us,
Is Irrelivant.
Irrelivant.


((woo, I'm literally shaking))
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Where do you go when you just dont know, and how do we relight the flame when it's cold?
Why do we dream when our thoughts mean nothing, and when will we learn to control?
I need serenity, In a place where I can't hide. I need serenity, Nothing changes days go by.
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Sun Nov 16, 2003 11:16 am

I really like your poem. :cool: Cool. I wish I could figure out who the 'You' you're referring to in this is. I have an idea, but I'm usually wrong - I'm working on an older version software. :grin:

Thanks for finally sharing some of your writing with us.

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Dirge » Sun Nov 16, 2003 5:02 pm

KA-WAAH!!
T.T I didnt want people to comment 'cause now I feel all weird ~.~
but um.. thanks for the comment n.n;
umm.. when i originally wrote it, it was for my chris.. he lives in Tennessee ToT
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Sun Nov 16, 2003 11:13 pm

No problem. :red: I'm sorry I commented and made you feel all weird. Oh no, are you going to feel weird again? AHH! I'll stop typing... now. :sweat:

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Dirge » Fri Nov 21, 2003 7:14 pm

Hahahahah! *pokes chloe with the finger of DOOM!*
jk n_n
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Fri Nov 21, 2003 10:43 pm

Ouch! You hit a vein in my eye. -.-

Hey, write another poem that I shouldn't comment on... but, I will. XD *there's goes the other eye.*

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Tet-chan » Sat Nov 22, 2003 5:32 am

Its good :thumb:

"Your very voice drives me to my insanity
I will wait for you a bittersweet eternity"

I like this part the best
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