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Postby girlninja » Fri Feb 25, 2005 11:05 am

hey here's poems ^^ let me know what you think i'll be posting them as much as i can


The murderers heart

a Fateful dark deed
a kind heart turned black
disbelief and doubt scarring
the heart that would end the world

a Prophesied dark deed
peace turned to sorrow
predicted and known
yet it did not stop the abyss from opening

A Bitter dark deed
Sought out yet turncoat
rejected by man , accepted by God
still the heart unsheathed the blade

A Vile dark deed
Here this murderers heart came into light
Doing just as he was told
here the Son of God became betrayed

The Last dark deed
a murderer black that none can compare
God was murdered
,murdered by a friend

well let me know what yall think ^^ hehe i'll post more as it comes
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Postby Magekind » Fri Feb 25, 2005 2:16 pm

That's rather... poetic.
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.

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Postby girlninja » Fri Feb 25, 2005 8:17 pm

glad you think so ^_^ heh
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous

and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
:dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance:

WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede

ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

:jump: :lol: :thumb:

"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II

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Postby girlninja » Sun Feb 27, 2005 2:27 am

Why?

In the intercession
for the souls of our humanity
a God came to man
came to die
all for his created
those that spat and beat him
those that cursed him, mocked him
yet he came
he knew
and he came
the lowliest saw him first
not the kings , the queens;
the poor, the deformed, the desitute
he called them from their abyss
and his friends knew him the best
yet they hurt him the worst
he could have died quick
a rock, a heavy stone, a cliff
could have died so easily
so painless, carefree
but he didn't
he took a cross
nail pierced, humiliated and betrayed
yet he loves us anyway
we are the one's who kill him day to day
we, his murderers, the one he calls "Beloved and friends"

heh this was an inspired poem so i didn't edit but i hope you like the rough work anyway ^^
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous

and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
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WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede

ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

:jump: :lol: :thumb:

"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II

98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.

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Postby girlninja » Sun Feb 27, 2005 2:37 am

Child

I looked at the child
the one on the corner
holding her mamma's hand
black dirt on her face
rags on her clothes
holding a sign for money
asking for food

I looked at the worn girl
her face gaunt with hunger
and watched, knowing some would give her food
something to fill her tummy
enough so it wouldn't hurt at night
while she lied with her mother close for warmth

The mother looked worse
pale lips, tired eyes
a life taht had seen so many trials
enough to weigh the sturdy rock down
enough to drown them both
yet she held her head high,
she held her little girl's hands
her eyes imploring
shame filled and desperate

I saw her and stopped
my face once turned to scorn
looking at her mother
"How could she let this happen?"
i had muttered so bitterly under my breath
starting to hate her all the more
God answered then, "How could you?"

heh hope you like oh and this isn't from personal experience tho i think we can all relate ^^
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and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
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WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede

ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

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"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II

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Postby Magekind » Mon Feb 28, 2005 1:16 pm

Good and good. The second one feels a wee bit more poetic, but I'm not going to put down something with such a strong point to be made.
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.

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Postby girlninja » Tue Mar 01, 2005 6:20 am

heh second one i guess is sadder too ^^; thankyou as always magekind for supporting me ^_^ i really do appreciate the post you give and any advice you might have ^^ *ninja poof out*
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous

and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
:dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance:

WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede

ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

:jump: :lol: :thumb:

"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II

98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.

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Postby girlninja » Thu Mar 03, 2005 10:17 am

Dancing

With the fast moving wind
on the canvas of the sea
you can see Him dancing
walking down the darkest street
singing to his heart content
feet moving to a new winded beat
dancing to the song of Gold
dancing to the Father's tune
free, arms wide
head tilted back in jubilee
great is the King of Heaven
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous

and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
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WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede

ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

:jump: :lol: :thumb:

"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II

98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.

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Postby Anna Mae » Thu Mar 03, 2005 1:20 pm

The murderer's heart felt like a song for some reason because of the way you capitalized the second word in each stanza.

The second one has a very good message.

Good stuff. Keep it up!
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Postby Magekind » Thu Mar 03, 2005 1:22 pm

Very, very good. Good message, enough rhyme and rhythm to draw even myself into reading the whole thing. And short enough I didn't lose interest.
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Postby Ssjjvash » Thu Mar 03, 2005 3:09 pm

These are great! I really like "Why?" a lot!!
If you can force your heart and nerve and sinew
To serve your turn long after they are gone
And so hold on when there is nothing left in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!' ...you'll be a Man, my son!

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Postby zelda » Tue Mar 08, 2005 3:26 pm

girlninja wrote:hey here's poems ^^ let me know what you think i'll be posting them as much as i can


The murderers heart

a Fateful dark deed
a kind heart turned black
disbelief and doubt scarring
the heart that would end the world

a Prophesied dark deed
peace turned to sorrow
predicted and known
yet it did not stop the abyss from opening

A Bitter dark deed
Sought out yet turncoat
rejected by man , accepted by God
still the heart unsheathed the blade

A Vile dark deed
Here this murderers heart came into light
Doing just as he was told
here the Son of God became betrayed

The Last dark deed
a murderer black that none can compare
God was murdered
,murdered by a friend

well let me know what yall think ^^ hehe i'll post more as it comes


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Postby girlninja » Tue Mar 08, 2005 7:35 pm

ok ...DEFINETLY not like me cuz it RHYMEs >< >< lol but i thought i would try and see if anything intellectual would come out lol hope it amuses you if anything lol

Writing

Why are all the greatest arts
about the suffering of the heart?
about the darkest, blackest deeds
forever wandering the world with dreams

Do these tales of misery and woe
Do they truly tell of man's circumstance
where the world is in such a chance
as to leave the writer's of this world forever writing of man's sorrow

Why do men not write of hope
where the world is born, redone
where no one is left to cope
with the heartache the minstrel strums

So my friends
i ask again
where is the writing of such tradegies end?
Where does the hope regain
or is it merely a dying flame?

heh kinda shaky but not bad for the first time i think ^_^
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WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede

ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

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Postby Anna Mae » Wed Mar 09, 2005 5:21 am

girlninja wrote:i thought i would try and see if anything intellectual would come out
I have tried that, but without the success you have obtained. Good work!
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Postby girlninja » Wed Mar 09, 2005 11:18 am

another one thankyou for all the support ^_^ i'm enjoying posting on here and getting replies

Gold and Blood

Seeing the eagles wings
as it soars above the trees
to Byzanitium it flies
to there it tries to reach the heavens
to the land filled with gold

And as this eagle
this vain and proud stocked beast
flies on the currents winds
to the land of Byzantium it calls
looking with clear and hungry eyes
towards the largest building there

It lands
quite happy
shaking loose it's feathers
and it touches the largest building there
turning the gold to blood

The blood covers the lands
flowing from the river bend
up towards this land of gold
covering the eagles wings
so that it may fly no more

With bloodsoaked wings
the being sees that it can no longer fly
so it instead goes and walks
trying to find a resting place

as it walks, no longer grand
no longer will people stand in awe
over the greatness of his flight
so instead he is forced to walk
with the other creatures of the dark

Yet they smile and laugh
do they not see, this grand bird wonders
that they walk among the dirt?
Yes, an owl replies, we dont' mind
we were here first

heh ok this was one of the first attempts to use a lot of symbolic imagery and some allusions heh if an explanation is needed of the poem please let me know but if you think you know what it means please i'd like to hear your answers not for the sake of being proudful or complicated but it would help me to whether i need to make my imagery more clear or what ^_^ Domo ^^ :lol:
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and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
:dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance:

WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede

ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

:jump: :lol: :thumb:

"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II

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Postby girlninja » Wed Mar 09, 2005 11:26 am

Willow Tree's Speech

I once talked to a Willow
and it talked back to me
and i wondered at what it said
for it told me
of dreams
of the future
of the past
of the things the trees so often speak of

Once, he said, there once was a tree
that was the greatest of them all
Cut down and stripped bare
the bark torn
the leaves ripped
it stood as a pair of logs

Yet this tree was deemed for greatness
with the great outreaching of it's limbs
it became the resting place of a King
Bloodsoaked and nailed when the King was placed
this tree became his constant friend
he did not abandon him as other's had done

When the mighty SOn of Man
gave his last breath
the tree was there to support the limp limbs
of the Dead Lamb that would come to rise
Thise tree was soon discarded
Blood still fresh on it's skin

Yet he was deemed great
for he held the body of the King
the one that had come to save you humans, the willow added,
the one who would come again

hoep you like ^_^
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and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
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WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede

ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

:jump: :lol: :thumb:

"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II

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Postby Anna Mae » Wed Mar 09, 2005 1:21 pm

girlninja, in regards to Gold and Blood wrote:if an explanation is needed of the poem please let me know
:?:
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Postby Magekind » Wed Mar 09, 2005 1:37 pm

Writing was soooo close. Sooooo close! It rhymed, for the most part, and I could almost catch a rhythm in it! Aaagh! It bugs me. I like it, though. Didn't have time to read the others yet. Oh, and yes, getting replies and comments is the funnest thing about it. That's why I don't do my short stories thread every day. It's just so... quiet there.
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.

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Postby Ssjjvash » Wed Mar 09, 2005 5:57 pm

Great work, girlninja! I really like Writing. In a way, it did seem to rhyme. Like the vowel sounds of some words.
If you can force your heart and nerve and sinew
To serve your turn long after they are gone
And so hold on when there is nothing left in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!' ...you'll be a Man, my son!

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Postby girlninja » Wed Mar 09, 2005 7:51 pm

girlninja wrote:another one thankyou for all the support ^_^ i'm enjoying posting on here and getting replies

Gold and Blood

Seeing the eagles wings
as it soars above the trees
to Byzanitium it flies
to there it tries to reach the heavens
to the land filled with gold

And as this eagle
this vain and proud stocked beast
flies on the currents winds
to the land of Byzantium it calls
looking with clear and hungry eyes
towards the largest building there

It lands
quite happy
shaking loose it's feathers
and it touches the largest building there
turning the gold to blood

The blood covers the lands
flowing from the river bend
up towards this land of gold
covering the eagles wings
so that it may fly no more

With bloodsoaked wings
the being sees that it can no longer fly
so it instead goes and walks
trying to find a resting place

as it walks, no longer grand
no longer will people stand in awe
over the greatness of his flight
so instead he is forced to walk
with the other creatures of the dark

Yet they smile and laugh
do they not see, this grand bird wonders
that they walk among the dirt?
Yes, an owl replies, we dont' mind
we were here first

heh ok this was one of the first attempts to use a lot of symbolic imagery and some allusions heh if an explanation is needed of the poem please let me know but if you think you know what it means please i'd like to hear your answers not for the sake of being proudful or complicated but it would help me to whether i need to make my imagery more clear or what ^_^ Domo ^^ :lol:




OK Anne Mae asked for a explanation lol and i don't blame ya lol

ok little history allusion here...Byzantium was a very very wealthy city in acient times...i believe close to Rome...the eagle is symbolic of a proud person...hence looking at the gold and wishing to be on the tallest building...but because there is such pride the eagle turns everything it touches to blood *signifying the pride before the fall* well the blood is the fall essentially...now it is left to walk with the other creatures other "mortals" as it were...now they walk in dirt but they are happy...signifying how those who stay in humility never worry about prideful things and are content where they are ^_^

hopefully that helped you a bit ^^ if you need any other's let me know

sorry i know these were deep....reading too much T.S. Eliot lately lol
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ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

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Postby girlninja » Wed Mar 09, 2005 7:52 pm

Magekind wrote:Writing was soooo close. Sooooo close! It rhymed, for the most part, and I could almost catch a rhythm in it! Aaagh! It bugs me. I like it, though. Didn't have time to read the others yet. Oh, and yes, getting replies and comments is the funnest thing about it. That's why I don't do my short stories thread every day. It's just so... quiet there.



lol glad you appreciated it magekind lol figured you would :P LOL and yes i left the allusion of rhythm JUST to torture you MWAHAHHAHAHA *Wink lol *ninja poof out* :P
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WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede

ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

:jump: :lol: :thumb:

"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II

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Postby Anna Mae » Thu Mar 10, 2005 5:13 am

Thanks for the explanation (I tend to read too much into things, so I am glad to know what you intended)! Good work.
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“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
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Postby girlninja » Fri Mar 11, 2005 10:06 am

hope you like ^_^ deep but not too symbolic this time ^^


In the dark room
here i sit
my anger seething
like a dragon on my shoulder

it whispers dark thoughts
into my mind
feeling the pain
of someone else's hurt

The scales come over me
writhing up my arm
like an all consuming waterfall
dripping fire from my soul

I scream
the hurt of the person's knife
piercing and ripping
feeling it tear into my flesh

Free flowing blood
not my own
quenching the raging inferno
feeling peace once more

The dragon drowns
purged within the blood
blood filling everything, an inquisition
bitterness flees before me

heh hope you like ^^ if it's too deep which i did unintentionally lol it's about how bitterness consumes but is driven out with the Blood of Jesus takes hold and you let him ^^ thanks guys
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous

and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
:dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance:

WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede

ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

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"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II

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Postby Magekind » Fri Mar 11, 2005 10:15 am

Uhhh.... hmmm..... the visuals came out a wee bit different than that when I just ran them through my little fantasy-generator toy I have installed in my head. Just a wee bit different.
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.

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Postby Anna Mae » Fri Mar 11, 2005 1:16 pm

To me, talking about blood cleansing things has always seemed a little weird. Having blood all over you would be discusting!
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“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
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Postby girlninja » Fri Mar 11, 2005 7:08 pm

lol well ya but i'm using the image of Jesus's blood washing over not human blood...the imaging is about bitterness *satan being the dragon/bitterness* i don't know lol my imaging is coming out wierd and not how i want it hopefully it will get better soon
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous

and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
:dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance:

WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede

ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

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98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.

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Postby girlninja » Tue Mar 15, 2005 10:38 am

two more ^_^


Distance

As I look out my window
the window pane
shielding my vision
i see the morning dawn rising
like a great Trumpet
heralding forth the day.
The wind blows it's sweet whispers
calling forth the clouds and dew
telling them to "come, COme!"
there is much work for them.
And i see past the long horizon
in the distance
like an ominous being, a lion ready to devour
black clouds and a waterfall of rain
looms in the distance
Bird of prey flee before it
as it cracks and rattles the bones
It announces it's arrival
like the beating of a drum.

Love

How long, my love
must i wait to feel
your sweet lips upon my cheek?
THe gentle touch of you hand upon my neck

Must i wait to hear you voice
the one that makes me laugh
and dries my tears
the voice that makes me fall in love
like a nightingale,
it's sweet melodious sound rings without

Love is patient and Kind
it is not jealous nor does it quarrel
it's what holds you in a tight embrace
when the world around you crashes asunder
when all is lost in deep commotion
Love is there with all it's splender
unconditional like a sweet bride

Can i wait any longer before my heart breaks?
When will our love come into being?
Or is it doomed to live in such a state of ectasy
that it can never come to pass?

heh hope you guys like ^_^
the first one was on a whim of inspiration and the second one was dedicated to those who understand missing a loved one *in the sense of boyfriend/husband/girlfriend/wife type of relationship ^_^ hope some of you could relate ^^
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous

and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
:dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance:

WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede

ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

:jump: :lol: :thumb:

"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II

98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.

*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^

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Postby Ssjjvash » Tue Mar 15, 2005 12:35 pm

I can imagine relating, does that count? lol, I'm playin'. ^^ Good job on all of them.
The poem on bitterness is great. I know that bitterness eats away at your insides. *shiver* Ah, but when you forgive...!
If you can force your heart and nerve and sinew
To serve your turn long after they are gone
And so hold on when there is nothing left in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!' ...you'll be a Man, my son!

Rudyard Kipling


Satan, bite the dust!Image

"You are not who your mistakes say you are; you are not the sum of your failures!"---Rev. Billy Miller

Proverbs 18:24
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Postby Anna Mae » Tue Mar 15, 2005 1:15 pm

Hmmm. Interesting.
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“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
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Postby Magekind » Tue Mar 15, 2005 3:28 pm

Both very good pieces, both with your distinctive style.
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