this is a song i wrote about how i was feeling when my mom was in the hospital.
This isn't the place nor the time,
If you leave me now my life will die,
I never thought it would end like this,
I wont let you leave me now,
I still need you here.
Will you be there to watch me grow up,
Will you be there on my wedding day,
Who will hold my hand,
Who will dry my tears,
I still need you here.
Is it that selfish to keep you here in agony,
Your suffering tortured my spirit,
Your pain broke my heart,
I cracked in two over you and i cant watch it any more.
Will the time just pass,
Will you slowly fade,
Are you going to leave me here,
Am i going to be alone,
I still need you here.
Will you be there to watch me grow up,
Will you be there on my wedding day,
Who will hold my hand,
Who will dry my tears,
I still need you here.
Is it that selfish to keep you here in agony,
Your suffering tortured my spirit,
Your pain broke my heart,
I cracked in two over you an i cant watch it any more.
i cant watch
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sonichiro - Posts: 281
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As Esoteric has stated. It's actually pretty good.
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.
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It's a beautiful, touching poem. Excellent writing.
I know I don't understand all of it; but my Mum has been sick for years, unable to get out of bed a lot, so I really feel for you. I hope you'll be okay; if there's anyway I can help, feel free to PM me.
I know I don't understand all of it; but my Mum has been sick for years, unable to get out of bed a lot, so I really feel for you. I hope you'll be okay; if there's anyway I can help, feel free to PM me.
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Myoti wrote:Elementary, my dear Watsoph. XD
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Photosoph - Posts: 1528
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thankyou. i wrote this soooooo long ago and i havent been in the writing forum in a while. i was surprised to see all the comments! thanks all. im ok now. i was dealing with some pretty brutal stuff for a while but its all good now and my mums okay now.
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sonichiro - Posts: 281
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i started tearing when reading that to be honest
however, how is your mother doing as of this moment?
however, how is your mother doing as of this moment?
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Mr. SmartyPants - Posts: 12541
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thankyou. i wrote this soooooo long ago and i havent been in the writing forum in a while. i was surprised to see all the comments! thanks all. im ok now. i was dealing with some pretty brutal stuff for a while but its all good now and my mums okay now.
I'm glad she's okay. ^_^ It is a really good poem as well -I'm sure it would go really well as the words for a song, especially with the repitition of the second verse.
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