Warrior 4 Jesus wrote:One thing I've noticed is if Draqon has paper-thin wings they would tear under the tremendous pressure of the waterfall spray. Keep that in mind.
Also when writing dialogue (which I still write too wooden) you don't always have to write "said Character" or "Character trembled" as your reader should be able to determine who is talking by what is being said.
Myoti wrote:Elementary, my dear Watsoph. XD
writers block! that's what it was called. i'm a dunce, don't mind me. thanx for those suggestions, i'll have to try 'em. but if i do, then don't be mad if nothing is added for a few months. then i'll blame it on Photosoph, and everyone will be mad at you and not me. nah, jk.
Myoti wrote:Elementary, my dear Watsoph. XD
Myoti wrote:Elementary, my dear Watsoph. XD
Myoti wrote:Elementary, my dear Watsoph. XD
Myoti wrote:Elementary, my dear Watsoph. XD
For a second I thought that some of the gifts were from fireworks and decorations. You might want to make that a little bit more clear (i.e. "All of them carried spices, precious metals, farics, furniture, fireworks, decorations, and gifts from far-off friends").LostChild wrote:All of them carried spices, precious metals, fabrics, furniture, gifts from far-off friends and family, fireworks, and decorations.
Myoti wrote:Elementary, my dear Watsoph. XD
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