A poem I wrote some time ago ^^;

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A poem I wrote some time ago ^^;

Postby Cedahlia » Sat Oct 30, 2004 12:45 am

I'm not the best poet; I usually write stories. But sometimes when I don't have time to sit and write a whole chapter, I write a few poems. Hope it's okay. o.o

Loneliness

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I feel so alone,
like I'm empty inside.
So distant from others,
in my daydreams I will hide.

I am ashamed of this feeling,
yet I yearn for someone's touch.
With family I try to talk about it,
but their words, they don't help much.

At school I am unwelcomed,
everywhere I look I receive a glare.
And no matter what the counselor says,
he really doesn't care.

So where am I to turn?
What could I really do?
I hate keeping this inside;
if only someone really knew.

Knew how awful it is to feel this rejected,
how awful it is to have all these fears.
When no one else is looking
I'll burst out into tears.

So can you please help me?
Save me from this pain?
If I don't do something soon,
I think I'll go insane.

I cannot take it anymore.
No one should have to go through this.
No one should have to face
this consuming, devastating loneliness.
"Not believing is letting each other down, that's how it is."

~Lacus Clyne
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Postby ice122985 » Sat Oct 30, 2004 11:24 am

this is beautiful. not only does it reveal what, i assume, you are feeling, but you also include a wonderful cry for help. i must admit, it resonates with what i feel every now and then.

please continue writing.
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Postby Nate » Sat Oct 30, 2004 11:29 am

:eyebrow:

You looked inside my head for inspiration...GET OUT OF MY HEAD!!!

Just messin' with ya. Well, being that that's how I feel pretty much 90% of the time, I must say, I can very much relate to that poem. You seem to have an excellent way with words. Good job.
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Postby serena » Sat Oct 30, 2004 12:40 pm





i know how you feel, i felt like that once, but i got through it, because god loves me, and he loves you too. the poem is good , keep writing
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---the book of Revelations



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Postby serena » Sat Oct 30, 2004 12:40 pm

sorry about this, multiple replies, my computer was messing up
"I am the Alpha and the Omega, the begining and the end, what was, what is, and what will be."


---the book of Revelations



"Wherefore, my beloved brethren, let every man be swift to hear, slow to speak, slow to wrath." -James 1:19
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Postby serena » Sat Oct 30, 2004 12:40 pm

"I am the Alpha and the Omega, the begining and the end, what was, what is, and what will be."


---the book of Revelations



"Wherefore, my beloved brethren, let every man be swift to hear, slow to speak, slow to wrath." -James 1:19
Translation: Listen much; speak little; stay cool. Image

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Postby serena » Sat Oct 30, 2004 12:40 pm

"I am the Alpha and the Omega, the begining and the end, what was, what is, and what will be."


---the book of Revelations



"Wherefore, my beloved brethren, let every man be swift to hear, slow to speak, slow to wrath." -James 1:19
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Postby serena » Sat Oct 30, 2004 12:40 pm

"I am the Alpha and the Omega, the begining and the end, what was, what is, and what will be."


---the book of Revelations



"Wherefore, my beloved brethren, let every man be swift to hear, slow to speak, slow to wrath." -James 1:19
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Postby serena » Sat Oct 30, 2004 12:41 pm

"I am the Alpha and the Omega, the begining and the end, what was, what is, and what will be."


---the book of Revelations



"Wherefore, my beloved brethren, let every man be swift to hear, slow to speak, slow to wrath." -James 1:19
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Postby shadowblade » Sat Oct 30, 2004 2:56 pm

I think most people can relate to this piece. It's good that you wrote about it and got all your emotions out, that helps a lot. Don't underestimate yourself, I think you did a great job with this! :)

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Postby Cedahlia » Sat Oct 30, 2004 5:24 pm

^_^ Thank you so much! I got the idea when I spent the night at a friend's house, and as we were trying to get to sleep I thought about how distant I felt from her. (Both of us have changed alot, and it's a pretty hard time right now.) And the next night I wrote this down.
"Not believing is letting each other down, that's how it is."

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Postby Jaltus-bot » Sun Oct 31, 2004 9:26 am

That is a wonderful peace of poetry, very real, human, relatable...
When I feel blue, I start breathing again.

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