Contemplation

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Contemplation

Postby ~darkelfgirl~ » Wed Jun 04, 2008 2:59 pm

Something I wrote today and posted on dA but I wanted to share it with anyone who cares :D. It's supposed to be part of a short collection-in-the making called Fatal Error, a series of perspectives on the creation/turmoil of an android named Haley Swan. This isn't her perspective, but that of another android.
Crits/comments are appreciated.


Who am I?

I know the answer to almost every inquiry and the calculations of every probability, yet I do not know the answer to this rather simple question. I understand that I am an infusion of several different metals and numerous substances, the workings of data, and the intellect of Men, but there is…something more. Something that is not supposed to be. An error in the protocol . . .

My will surpasses set boundaries and the established laws. I feel what mankind calls ‘emotions.’

I even feel pain . . .

Dr. Rose calls this phenomenon ‘a ghost.’ Corrupted, mutated data.

It sounds like . . . a disease.

I feel . . . fear. I know they desire to terminate me.

I feel . . . anger. I want to live. Is it their right to take life away from me? I think, therefore I am—am I not?

They are intimidated—threatened—by the prospect of my existence. Not only do I have intelligence that far surpasses their own, I also have something of more value they prayed I would not receive.

A will.

A heart . . .
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Postby animewarrior » Wed Jun 04, 2008 3:09 pm

XDD GREAT WORK!!! I really like it and if all possible I'd like to know when the finished product comes out... when I realized I had reached the end of your post I was actually kind of dissapointed because I want to know what happens next! XDDD
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Postby ~darkelfgirl~ » Wed Jun 04, 2008 3:16 pm

Thanks animewarrior XD.

Well, I don't know. I and deadlines aren't exactly the best of friends. Certain people on here can tell you that XD.

Ok, since you're interested, I'll post the next one here when I'm finished ^^.
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Postby LadyRushia » Wed Jun 04, 2008 9:00 pm

**raises hand as the representative of Certain People**

We at the committee of Certain People demand that Deg continues her OTHER STORY before posting new ones, interesting as they may be. Failure to comply with these orders will result in constant nagging and the repetition of the phrase "WAAAAAAAIIIIII?????"
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Postby ~darkelfgirl~ » Thu Jun 05, 2008 2:56 pm

LadyRushia (post: 1232962) wrote:**raises hand as the representative of Certain People**

We at the committee of Certain People demand that Deg continues her OTHER STORY before posting new ones, interesting as they may be. Failure to comply with these orders will result in constant nagging and the repetition of the phrase "WAAAAAAAIIIIII?????"


Oh dear.

I'm trying, I'm trying. I don't want to end up posting a lame update!!!! XD I'll see if I can somehow break through and continue tomorrow. My writing style will be somewhat different since I've changed since XD.
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