my story
PostPosted: Mon May 29, 2006 8:01 am
HELP ME! I need some help with this story. I need a title and tell me if I need to add some thing oh F.O.C stands for followers Of Christ. So my story.
Chapter one
Bump bump "AHHH!" "What is it!" "My coffee spilt on my leg!" Ricky was in the back seat of his father's old red Ford with his (tamed) pet tiger serg
waiting for the everyday ordinary dad spilt coffe on his leg when they went over a bump day, however this was no ordinary day.
There where three people in the Ford: the first was Ricky's dad profeser David Burn, who's Theolgy was famous worldwide. He had smooth black hair and dark blue eyes, he had a dark tan from staying outside to long in the deserts of Israel. The second was Branden Burn. First born in the Burn family and had just graduated from high school. He had black curly hair green eyes and a light tan from helping his father on digs. The third was Ricky Burn, he'd just past sixth grade and had dirty dish water blound hair, and had blue eyes. He was realy looking forward to summer vacation river rafting, sking, sledding and hailo diving. all of which had Ricky's name on it or so he thought? Oh sorry I almost forgot Serg the tiger who was given that name for the lightning stripes on his blue fur. (don't ask I'll explain later) He had bloodred eyes that could make anyone (who didn't know he was tamed) qiver in fear and hope the monster (that's what the teacher's who saw him called him)would go away.
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"So dad."Ricky said. "Don't keep me in suspence." "Where are we going?" "Well I was th..." profeser Burns was inturupted by the ringing of his cell phone. he fliped it open and anserd. "Yes... what?!? No... yes sir." I'll be right there bye." He put his cell back in his shirt pocket. "Well? where are we going?" Riky asked. "Were going to F.O.C." profeser Burns said. Ricky looked at serg. What was f.o.c?
Prof. Burns swerved right and landed in a river! "AHHHHHHHH!!" Ricky screamed. "Where gona die ahhhhwahhhhhaaaaa." then Ricky fainted.The last thing Ricky heard was Brandon (who says his first words on page two) yell "wa who," and his dad say "I'm getting to old for this."
when Ricky came to he thouhgt he saw an angel. It was a girl angel her hair was long and fair. Her green eyes where lovely and Riky tought she was beautiful.
Chapter one
Bump bump "AHHH!" "What is it!" "My coffee spilt on my leg!" Ricky was in the back seat of his father's old red Ford with his (tamed) pet tiger serg
waiting for the everyday ordinary dad spilt coffe on his leg when they went over a bump day, however this was no ordinary day.
There where three people in the Ford: the first was Ricky's dad profeser David Burn, who's Theolgy was famous worldwide. He had smooth black hair and dark blue eyes, he had a dark tan from staying outside to long in the deserts of Israel. The second was Branden Burn. First born in the Burn family and had just graduated from high school. He had black curly hair green eyes and a light tan from helping his father on digs. The third was Ricky Burn, he'd just past sixth grade and had dirty dish water blound hair, and had blue eyes. He was realy looking forward to summer vacation river rafting, sking, sledding and hailo diving. all of which had Ricky's name on it or so he thought? Oh sorry I almost forgot Serg the tiger who was given that name for the lightning stripes on his blue fur. (don't ask I'll explain later) He had bloodred eyes that could make anyone (who didn't know he was tamed) qiver in fear and hope the monster (that's what the teacher's who saw him called him)would go away.
.
"So dad."Ricky said. "Don't keep me in suspence." "Where are we going?" "Well I was th..." profeser Burns was inturupted by the ringing of his cell phone. he fliped it open and anserd. "Yes... what?!? No... yes sir." I'll be right there bye." He put his cell back in his shirt pocket. "Well? where are we going?" Riky asked. "Were going to F.O.C." profeser Burns said. Ricky looked at serg. What was f.o.c?
Prof. Burns swerved right and landed in a river! "AHHHHHHHH!!" Ricky screamed. "Where gona die ahhhhwahhhhhaaaaa." then Ricky fainted.The last thing Ricky heard was Brandon (who says his first words on page two) yell "wa who," and his dad say "I'm getting to old for this."
when Ricky came to he thouhgt he saw an angel. It was a girl angel her hair was long and fair. Her green eyes where lovely and Riky tought she was beautiful.