CAA: Christian Anime Alliance

im not much of a writer but heres a poem i just now wrote lol comments or critisism is welcome i really dont care i just want opinions, what should i change, is the title name ok?

True Love?

These feelings are so new
my heart races when im with you
im begining to wonder if its really true

When im with you im never blue
because i see right through you
and i know i can believe in you

theres somethin i want to say to you
i just need to find a way to
...i think i love you.

It good, but it only is discribing something on the surface, go deeper into the feelings.

haha thanks that was actually like one of the first poems i wrote.. i dont really know how to go deeper into my feelings...

ssj2gohan61 wrote:haha thanks that was actually like one of the first poems i wrote.. i dont really know how to go deeper into my feelings...

It takes some practice my friend =D

Also read other poems they can halp improve your own work.

i think thats pretty good!!!! good job!

It almost seems that it could be the lyrics to a song. I like the rhyme at the end of each line. It was pretty good! Poetry is so awesome because it can really be anything. It doesn't have to rhyme if you don't want it to. You can do anything with it! Keep up the great work!