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A Poetic Coffee Shop

PostPosted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 8:12 am
by Sakura's Wings
If you have a poem that your are really proud about, post it here. It can be based on anythng. Please write down what inspired you, or wheter it just came to mind. If there are any pictures to go along with it, thoe are accepted as well.

PostPosted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 8:25 am
by Sakura's Wings
my first entry is called Summer Night Storm
i was inspired to write this poem on a stormy night. i think thats wheni get my best work.

Scream through night
and all hallowed slain
come lie in shallow light
and one sha'n't rise again

Flash of light
Gice mourning pain
Hold victim tight
Upon the the threshold
May he be lain

Summer kills
Down memory lane
Many cold thrills
And once more,
One mayn't be sane

Come whisper me near
You will see
All your fear
Will become me

A silent draught
A lonesome cry
Mortal terror
Forget my lies

Watches enveloped
within cotton layers
The tocking developes
through fearsome scares

Searing cries
Cut through the air
Everything dies
Without love and care

All the things
You have heard
And everything
You have ever learned

All will be lost
'Cause mortal pain
It comes at a cost
And all in Vain

Find your light
Slowly watch it
fade away
Your worthless fight
was no use in
any way


07-19-05

tell me what you think!!

PostPosted: Sat Jul 30, 2005 10:26 am
by steelbeliever
in regard to your wish...i am posting my own poem here that i was asked to write for a friend of mine who died a few weeks ago...btw...your poem was suberb!


Sometimes when I am alone
I think of the times when I had lost my home
Not physically lost
But spiritually blind
Bones were not broken
But minds numbed over time
I have spent many hours searching for words
To tell you my sorrow in things that have occurred
Anger and pain
Silent words not expressed
Hateful glances
Sneers at best
You cannot forgive for sins too great
Many times apologies came too late
I have only words to give to you
These words will hopefully show to you
That only time will heal the hearts
That by brutal death has torn apart
Tears have been shed
Like blood that has fallen
Empty words batter the soul
Pity comes calling
Sad eyes and hands
That only touch
Minds never meet
They can only say so much
You had high hopes
And dreams for your child
I know you were disappointed
When he was rowdy or wild
We all knew him
Whether as teammate or son
But one thing never changed
Only when he was lost
Did we realize the price
The terrible cost
And now as he rests
In a grave in the ground
He will look into eyes
Where glory is found
And into loving arms
Will he forever sleep
And hopefully in heaven
Will we someday once again meet

PostPosted: Tue Aug 02, 2005 4:42 am
by Sakura's Wings
owwhooooooooahhhhh. that is soo......touching and deep.... oh my gosh...so old was your friend? what did he die from..man oh, man...that poem makes you realize that lifes too short and you should take cre of apologies and forgiveness first, adn thell people you love and arrpecctate them more, too...keep up the great work.and i am so sorry to hear sout wour frind. when my 8th grade teacher, Mrs. potter always used to say, dont let it get you down too much, you'll always see them later in heaven.

PostPosted: Tue Aug 02, 2005 5:32 pm
by kazekami
Wow thats a powerful poem. It's important to say teh important things to people. I haven't written any poetry in years. So I have nothing to share really. =)

PostPosted: Tue Aug 02, 2005 9:21 pm
by phinny5608
Wow, that was really good. Almost brutal, but in a very good way.

PostPosted: Wed Aug 10, 2005 3:38 pm
by Sakura's Wings
Steelbeliever is a great poet! spread the word!!!!!! im glad you all have come!!!

PostPosted: Wed Aug 10, 2005 3:40 pm
by Shadowchild
the first quote in my siggy is part of a poem i wrote...

PostPosted: Fri Aug 12, 2005 1:23 pm
by Sakura's Wings
it sounds more like a broken-hearted love song.....but i like. Sperad the work ppl!! thank yous!!!!!! i love yas!lol

PostPosted: Wed Aug 17, 2005 8:08 am
by Starfire1
*shiver* i wish i could write that well *jealous* "mad props" to you guys with "mad skills"
(go Mrs. Potter!)

PostPosted: Wed Aug 17, 2005 9:45 am
by Capt_Barbarian
I suppose I'll post this poem I wrote ages ago inspired by my girlfriend. So I hope you guys like it. I have a bunch of other poems I've written over the last year so maybe I put together my poem collection and post it sometime.


In Forever lies a dream
A dream only you and I share
In Forever lies a secret
A secret only you know
In Forever lies a smile
A smile only you can see
In Forever lies a hope
A hope only you can keep alive
In Forever lies a part of me
A part of me I only share with you
In Forever lies a face
A face only you can cherish
In Forever lies a voice
A Voice only you can hear
In Forever lies a sound
A melodic sound only you can hear and enjoy

In Forever lies the secrets to my heart.
In Forever lies you and me together until the end of time

I love you Victoria. And nothing will change that.

It's alittle shorter then some of the poems I write but most are about that size and sometimes when I'm depressed about something I write a poem like this.

"If a tree falls in the forest,
and no one is there,
does it make a sound?"

Sometimes I feel like that tree,
wondering if anyone notices me.
If I were to die, would anyone notice?
Would anyone remember the weird guy?
I am afraid to die, but even more afraid of life.
Putting a blade through my skin
would people notice the blood?
Perhaps if I cried,
the tears would drown society,
leaving me to feel lost and alone.
Only the tree understands my feelings.
Fallen.

These are old poems of mine I haven't written any recently but these to are some of my poems that got the most prasie. I'm not really "proud" about any of my poems it all matters on if people like them or not.

PostPosted: Wed Aug 17, 2005 12:09 pm
by Starfire1
beautiful, both of them. i especially like the second one.
EDIT: I can't believe I'm posting this. I have zero confidence in my work.

kiss me, kill me
your lips are like poison
they're stained an ivy green
a clear warning to the fortunate, not possessed by your spells
despite the death dripping from the corners of your mouth like liquid onyx
there's a dark something within me
that still craves their sweet carress
a something haunting deep within me
that needs to test the borderlines
of its host's self-destruction
it's doing all it can to pull me away
so it can get closer to its own selfish desires
please kiss me
please kill me

PostPosted: Wed Aug 17, 2005 10:15 pm
by Capt_Barbarian
Like the depressing ones eh? Here's my only other two "good" ones

==============
I'm sorry this is in red,
but my heart just won't stop beating,
my wrists just won't stop bleeding,
my lungs just won't stop breathing.
I don't want you to judge me,
just see me as I am.
I love with what I'll never have,
wanting to hold, touch what will never be mine.
Just let me use this blade,
let me slice it deep.
Let me complete this suicide,
let me stop my life.
I love you with all my heart....


============
Frozen tears falling,
they shatter like glass,
my breath hangs in the cold winter air.
I hear my own footsteps, crunching in the snow.
I hug my coat to myself,
not because I'm cold,
but because my chest hurts.
My heart is broken, torn in two.
Each half frozen and bleeding.
I fall to my knees and sink in the snow.
A blade, silver and sharp,
falls from my pocket.
I grap it and lunge it into my chest,
I lie in the snow and freeze.
I've released my grasp on life.
Darkness overcomes me,
my hands clutch the blade.
Crimson tears, amber eyes.
Wrists soaked with blood.
Time...stands still.

I suppose I'll throw this one in too.

================
I dare not summon them,
Though so special to me.
At times I think I've shed enough,
To fill a vast dark sea.

At times they spill out on my pillow,
In the hours right before dawn.
Maybe regret or retrospect,
Times with a loved one now gone.

They are so warm and so salty,
As they make their way, down my cheeks.
Yet they comfort me when I'm sad or lonely,
Give me solace, when I'm so weak.

Should old thoughts, or new words pierce my heart,
I seek a silent refuge in haste.
And let my trail of tears,
Then start.

They are always so close to me,
Whether by night, or day.
They seem to know, exact the right time.
To wash away all my grief.

Father time can't deny or lessen,
Their intimacy as I count off the years.
These dear friends of mine, oh how sublime,
That made up, "my trail of tears."

PostPosted: Thu Aug 18, 2005 5:22 am
by Sakura's Wings
Starfire1 wrote:*shiver* i wish i could write that well *jealous* "mad props" to you guys with "mad skills"
(go Mrs. Potter!)

yes, we all know mis potter rocks! for others, mrs. potter is an awesome englidh teacher!!!!

PostPosted: Thu Aug 18, 2005 5:32 am
by Sakura's Wings
OH. MY. GOSH.
there sre not enough comlments in the world to fufill the need those poems ask for, C. barbarian. those are so awesome *wants to huggle, but afraid to touch such great peices of work*

and star, that was so great...i cant pic a part i lik most.

as soon as i find some of the other ones ive written, i'll post them

PostPosted: Thu Aug 18, 2005 8:24 am
by Starfire1
and once again the second one is my favorite, capt_barbarian, but i can see the first one playing out like a short film. *applause for both*
confidence up 5 from 0. thanks SW.

PostPosted: Thu Aug 18, 2005 10:32 am
by Capt_Barbarian
lol alright I might post a few more thats it for my depressing poems all the others are a few (like 3) misc poems and the rest are love and lost love poems (clearly I'm the romantic type who has had his heart broken a few times)

PostPosted: Thu Aug 18, 2005 12:42 pm
by Sakura's Wings
Starfire1 wrote:and once again the second one is my favorite, capt_barbarian, but i can see the first one playing out like a short film. *applause for both*
confidence up 5 from 0. thanks SW.


youre welcome........ :banned:

PostPosted: Thu Aug 18, 2005 12:51 pm
by Sakura's Wings
Here's one of mine

At My Side No More

Everyday was so
Warm
with you by my
side

all the time
i just felt
like nothing better
could ever
happen

i though i'd had
such a sad
and
cold short life

then you came
and all my coulds
just rolled away

you brought
such a peice
i just couldnt
explain

Then one day
someone came
and hurt you

I couldnt stop it
I didnt know
It came too fast
and i came too late

i cant believe
that now youre gone
now no one's
here by me

at your grave
i sat and prayed
we'd see each other
again someday

God rest your soul,
and end my mourning
so I can realize
that youre safe
and in a better place

i did that one a loooong time ago

PostPosted: Sun Sep 18, 2005 3:48 pm
by Starfire1
Sakura's Wings wrote:youre welcome........ :banned:

*confused* ...did you just ban me?...

PostPosted: Sun Sep 18, 2005 4:06 pm
by starfire
Wow! I had no idea a thread like this existed! You're all so good! Sad poems too...

PostPosted: Sun Sep 18, 2005 7:44 pm
by steelbeliever
hey! I'm so glad this has been spreading...now...i have another old poem that i wrote a eyar ago or so...i posted it once before but i s'pose i'll share it again ^_^

Glass is shattered by your hand
Angels wait for your command
Metallic wing
Spread like death
Whispers run through fire red hair
Flowers wilt make way for despair
Legends secrets tales of old
Ancient songs the past unfold
A conqueror
Of massive strength
Truth soul seeker
Stopping at no lengths
Torn by duty
Tortured mind
Evil memories leave behind
Heal the heart
And mend the bone
Beautiful face
Wrapped in stone
Endless life span
Tired and weak
Your future hold
The past will speak
No more wars or battle cries
Fill the oceans, lands or skies
Make a grave
Eternal rest
Hope for weary
Red heart blest

PostPosted: Mon Sep 19, 2005 5:07 pm
by Josh Fisher
umm this is something my sister wrote and I thought it was pretty cool, it is called I Asked God


I asked god for a Rose
He gave me a bouquet
I asked god for a minite
he gave me a day
I asked god for true love
He gave me that too
I asked god for an Angel
He gave me you

-by Ami Fisher

what do you think, she does kinda have a unique poetic style Ya?

PostPosted: Mon Sep 19, 2005 6:52 pm
by starfire
This is just a poem I wrote about a girl who loves a guy that's going away from God. She's sitting on a park Bench praying for him in the rain. It's not great, but it fills the time.

Waiting

I’m sitting her, waiting
For you to open up
I’m dying here, waiting
But, still, I won’t give up
I’m crying here, praying
You won’t give me a cue
I’m desperate here, praying
For strength just to help you
I’m lonely here, wishing
For there to come a day
I’m always here, wishing
That soon you’ll find your way
It’s raining here, flooding
It’s half past one I think
It’s dark out here, flooding
I know I’m on the brink
You’re drowning there, empty
The rain keeps falling down
I’m waiting here, empty
Raindrops the only sound
I’ll still be here, waiting
When you return to me
He’ll still be there, always
Guiding you to me