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They Play
PostPosted: Sun Apr 03, 2005 7:25 pm
by Mr. SmartyPants
They Play
They awaken
They cry
They eat
They giggle
They play
They awaken
They run
They shout
They laugh
They play
They awaken
They chat
They party
They drink
They play
They awaken
They threaten
They terrorize
They kill
They play
PostPosted: Tue Apr 05, 2005 3:00 pm
by Magekind
Now that is an interesting peice. I actually like the point given by it.
PostPosted: Tue Apr 05, 2005 5:45 pm
by Mr. SmartyPants
thanks ^^
PostPosted: Wed Apr 06, 2005 12:34 am
by true_noir_chloe
This might make a cute little children's book if it wasn't for the terrorizing and killing at the end.
It was pretty good.
On another note, MSP, you should start ONE thread for all your poetry. I noticed that you started a new thread for each and every one of your poems. I think you would get a better response if you do what some of the other poets (Icarus, Rachel, Joan of Arc) do and have your own poetry thread. Just a thought. ~_^
PostPosted: Wed Apr 06, 2005 12:40 am
by Aka-chan
Oh wow. That's really cool! I love the simplicity and yet the progression. I'm not a fan of poetry, but this is awesome, MSP! (Never thought of you as a poet... ^_~)
PostPosted: Wed Apr 06, 2005 12:35 pm
by Mr. SmartyPants
true_noir_chloe wrote:On another note, MSP, you should start ONE thread for all your poetry.
ooooooohhhhhhhhh okay
PostPosted: Wed Apr 06, 2005 12:55 pm
by Godly Paladin
Sounds like a Tamagotchi to me...
...but then again, that's just me, ya know.
PostPosted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 10:50 am
by Mr. SmartyPants
hahahaha thats funny G_P
PostPosted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 2:03 pm
by chibiphonebooth
wow, ryan i <3 it its so cool! ^_^
PostPosted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 5:56 pm
by Scribs
They Awoke
They CAAed
They Congratulated Mr. Smartypants
They Left
They Played
Good job
PostPosted: Sat Apr 09, 2005 2:09 pm
by Godly Paladin
I think Smartypants is creating a new form of poetry! We'll call it...
SMARTY-KU!!!
Even better than haiku!
PostPosted: Sat Apr 09, 2005 2:15 pm
by Ingemar
ROOOOOOWRRR! Let me try!
They mew
They purr
They sleep
They pounce
They make Ingemar's bed smell of ammonia
They play
That would have been great, Mr. Stupid Pants, if only you were a lady. MRRROWWR!
Tomkyou, this is hardly the time or the place! Good job MSP. It's a good compromise between free and blank verse. It isn't as constrained as blank verse, but it has good structure and unity unlike free verse. You get a gold star.
PostPosted: Wed Apr 13, 2005 5:29 pm
by Mr. SmartyPants
yaaayyy ^_^
PostPosted: Fri Apr 15, 2005 1:39 pm
by Godly Paladin
Let the Smarty-ku crafting commence!
PostPosted: Fri Apr 15, 2005 2:23 pm
by Kawaiikneko
That was great! I loved how it was so simple but had such a profound meaning.