A Few Pathetic Attempts at Writing

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A Few Pathetic Attempts at Writing

Postby Zarn Ishtare » Tue Dec 26, 2006 2:13 pm

Well, here I am again, with alittle something to offer you.


*Lately, I've been busy with work, but I've been hammering out this very rough idea, something rough but real, and I wanted to see what people thought.....


The premise is simple: A man in brown is on a beach, looking over the water. He sees some youth writing a terrible epitath about God in the sand. So saddened by this is our man that he takes up his walking stick and spends the rest of his life writing "I love you, God" in the wet sand of the shore.


This has been an odd thought on my mind, to be honest, but its something I like considering. Of course, there are things that would have to be realistic, obviously the man may be considered simple, and he's probably homeless, living on the shore....simple mind....But the entire point that this premise is intended for is awesome, I think: That a man would consider God's hurt, so sorrowful that someone would say something like that, that he tearfully takes up a recompense, laboring every day to try and erase the stain of those hateful words on the beach.


I've always had trouble taking symbolic figures and making them into characters, into living, believable people. For me, their names are their characters, the Man Who Writes In The Sand "I Love You God" is his NAME, more important than some human constraint. In short, We Are what we do.


I love you, Lord.*
With your doubt, all is comfort
We are all as we appear
No more questions left unanswered
No more wonder, no more fear
Nothing is beauty, nothing's feeling
Blood where there once was a soul
So I ask you, prove yourself
Make me believe that you are whole
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Postby Anna Mae » Wed Dec 27, 2006 1:57 pm

By epitath, do you mean epitaph?

I really like your idea. I think that you should pursue it.
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[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:

“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
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Postby Photosoph » Wed Dec 27, 2006 4:26 pm

It's an interesting idea; I agree with Anna Mae.
However, I find short stories hard to write, myself. :sweat: So I can't really offer you any tips on how to do it or anything. But it's definitely an intriguing idea that could make a very good short story.
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Postby creed4 » Wed Dec 27, 2006 6:16 pm

Interesting, Just work on it,

A thought the sand will always fade, but a person's life can not be silence.
Tis No Fool to lose what he can not keep to gain what he can never lose.
What does it profit a man to gain the World yet lose his soul.
Choose Life that you Might live.
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